This is the sentence she gave us:
The beating of the drum let them know that an important decision would be made one that affected the safety and well-being of the entire mouse community...
This is what I wrote:
You can hear the chicken drum sticks beating faster and faster on the drum kit.
You can hear the chicken drum sticks beating faster and faster on the drum kit.
You could hear desperado little heart beating faster and faster he knew something was going to happen, something bad.
He followed the sound that lead him to the mouse community and to his father and mother.
When despereaux went in the room they were all staring at him because he broke the mouse law.
He knew that he had to go down to the rats in the dark cold and wet Dungeon.
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