persuasive writing

Persuasive writing 
WALT: write a persuasive piece to convince someone of a opinion 

This week we did persuasive writing to persuasive someone to get me something or do some thing else.

 Have you ever wanted to stand still and still move at the same time? I would like a hoverboard with Bluetooth to be able to achieve my goal. Do you want to feel like you are flying and listen to music at the same time? Well I do. That is why I want to have a hoverboard that is bluetooth and i want a hoverboard that has a handle as well and can i get one blue as well and i want lights on the side. My first reason is that Maddi got a phone when she asked for one and I think it is only fair to have something I want. My second reason is because they are really fun to be on and my legs won’t hurt. My third reason is when you don’t want to stand any more you can just sit down and still move. So that is why I want a hoverboard and I will learn a lot of tricks. Persuasive Writing Success Criteria Introduction Opening question Opinion/Reason 3 Reasons Each paragraph is one idea supported with your reasons/facts Conclusion This ties back/recaps back to the introduction Highlight evidence of linking words.

 Well done Mackenzie i like how you said My first reason is that Maddi got a phone when she asked for one and I think it is only fair to have something I want and I also liked how you had lots of facts also you had lots of linking words and you introduction was good and it matched the conclusion maybe Next time you could make the sentences more interesting.

 Next time DO NOT copy and paste my work into your feedback think of your work. And next time I will make my sentences more interesting.